Wednesday, May 20, 2009

Bitter ending

She looms in my mind; she hovers
my thoughts completely aromatized
I remember the days; us lovers
as one we seemed to be optimized
A duo is oh so efficient
at nursing the needs of each other
In time you become so proficient
there is never a need for another
But break the pair and you'll find
alone just tastes acidophilous
With beings no longer combined
each second in time feels so treacherous

10 comments:

paisley said...

it is difficult if not impossible not to feel bitter in a situation like this.. you are just working your way thru it.. it takes a while and hurts a lot,, but you will make it... i promise.

pia said...

You posted in 3WW!
I keep coming back to the second to last sentence. For some reason it takes a bit out of the sting of the last one

ThomG said...

I have felt pain like this, and you have captured it so well. Ouch.

anthonynorth said...

There's a deceptive deepness to this. Ouch, indeed.

Andy Sewina said...

Yeah, the pain hurts, but it makes good poetry. I love the sound of that word 'acidophilous', and the little word thingy, 'a duo is oh so'.

Tumblewords: said...

Fine work that shows where many of us have been...Neatly written!

Neverending story said...

I thought this was very well written, full of subtle poignancy. Enjoyed the use of acidophilous.

gautami tripathy said...

This somehow touched me..

3WW: no pawns spared

Life without Clots said...

whew, I am going to eat some yogurt after this...

blisshappens said...

yes, ouch. splitting hurts when the combined becomes so "one" -Meg