Wednesday, May 20, 2009

Bitter ending

She looms in my mind; she hovers
my thoughts completely aromatized
I remember the days; us lovers
as one we seemed to be optimized
A duo is oh so efficient
at nursing the needs of each other
In time you become so proficient
there is never a need for another
But break the pair and you'll find
alone just tastes acidophilous
With beings no longer combined
each second in time feels so treacherous
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10 comments:

  1. paisleyMay 20, 2009 at 10:16 AM

    it is difficult if not impossible not to feel bitter in a situation like this.. you are just working your way thru it.. it takes a while and hurts a lot,, but you will make it... i promise.

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  2. piaMay 20, 2009 at 4:58 PM

    You posted in 3WW!
    I keep coming back to the second to last sentence. For some reason it takes a bit out of the sting of the last one

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  3. Thom GabrukiewiczMay 20, 2009 at 5:13 PM

    I have felt pain like this, and you have captured it so well. Ouch.

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  4. anthonynorthMay 20, 2009 at 5:52 PM

    There's a deceptive deepness to this. Ouch, indeed.

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  5. Andy SewinaMay 20, 2009 at 6:49 PM

    Yeah, the pain hurts, but it makes good poetry. I love the sound of that word 'acidophilous', and the little word thingy, 'a duo is oh so'.

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  6. Tumblewords:May 20, 2009 at 8:28 PM

    Fine work that shows where many of us have been...Neatly written!

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  7. Neverending storyMay 21, 2009 at 6:21 AM

    I thought this was very well written, full of subtle poignancy. Enjoyed the use of acidophilous.

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  8. gautami tripathyMay 21, 2009 at 11:51 AM

    This somehow touched me..

    3WW: no pawns spared

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  9. Life without ClotsMay 22, 2009 at 11:06 AM

    whew, I am going to eat some yogurt after this...

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  10. AnonymousMay 23, 2009 at 11:45 AM

    yes, ouch. splitting hurts when the combined becomes so "one" -Meg

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